Good and effective, for the most part. The art style fit well. Having each character coloured differently gave it a sense of individualism for each character, and properly seperated them throughout the story. What i didn't like is how you chose to draw most of it with a brush tool, but chose certain elements like the car and coffin to be drawn wit the pencil tool. Simply didn't do it for me.
But, if your going to make a flash that is basicly a slide show, it would have been nice to have some added detail. Character models were well done, but more thought put into the backgrounds and maybe seperate fills for all the elements would have done nicely.
The story was an interesting one. Not so much the story itself, but the basic concept you were trying to achieve. I do beleive alot more could have been done with it though. Something a little more thought provoking, ironic, or simply sad. I would have liked this guys life to have been a little more interesting, to say the least. But the whole idea of it was an interesting one at least.
So, story needed some more strength behind it, music worked well, style worked well, and was overall and effective effort. Good job. Hope to see some more from ya.
Thanks number man!
I'm glad you enjoyed it... Thanks for the review, and your vote.
K. You did a good job with this thing. But there are some issues to work out, of course.
Firstly is, I've been watching your work for years now, and it does not seem you have evolved much. I found your fight scenes more exhilarating back in the day. Just seems that after so many years, you should be destroying your earlier work, but it fails to go above and beyond what you used to do.
Another issue is pace. The content and structure of the movie did not seem to parallel the pace well enough. The fight scenes seemed to be slower than they should have been, and did not last long enough. There were simply small sprints of action. And the music was not dynamic enough. Music can control pace of a movie very well when used correctly, and it did not pace this movie correctly. Sound effects work the same way. Going from just music to constant slashing and killing sound effects and quicken the pace of a movie as well. There seemed to be a lack of sound effects, and did not seem to help the pace a whole lot either.
The storyline was another issue. Not that it was too thin, because thin story can hold up in an action movie like this very well. Thing is, it only holds up when it works in parallel with the movie itself. Like...Maness movies are pointless violence with a very thin storyline, and the storyline is displayed and explained in the same fashion. Short and quick. Story never got in the way of the action. This is not the case with yours. Your story is thin, yet it slows down the pace of the movie by trying to be a more noticeable presence. This simply does not work.
But, even with all this "critique", you managed to make one heck of a movie. Keep it up.
It was pretty intense. Well done. Someone has been playing way to much FEAR.
You lose alot of points on the sound effects. Stealing sounds from a game is not what i consider quality sound effects. I think maybe you shoulda done something different there.
But i enjoyed the character movement, even thogh it looked a little wierd at times, but overall a very well done piece of animation.
Pretty lame actually. The animation itself was lazy, not realistic at all. The models and invironment were bland, did not look like a pinball machine at all. Camera movement should have been made more dynamic, make it a little more interesting. Just sorta sat there. And....well, it just needed alot of work. Maybe look at some pinball machines, change the colour theme (add lights, and more mettalic looking), and alot of it seemed to have a wood texture, even though modern pinball machines are for from made of wood. Also, it need some kind of theme, like how all pinball machines have a theme like South Park, Lord of the Rings, and shit like that. Maybe you coulda made it outer space or something of that sort.
I dont really see any overwhelmingly positive feature in this movie. Song was alright i guess.
Anyway, work a little harder next time. Im sure you can come up with something alot better if you spent some more time and effort. Anyway, good luck.
Its either stolen...ot, much more likely, old. Mainly because the size limit is 10 megs, not 5.
Anyway, with that outa the way, it was a very interesting watch. Very neat idea. Not that its probable in any way, but ofcourse its not meant to be.
Anyway, good job, but i was disapointed in the ending, as it could have whent on alot longer if you had gone to the 10 meg limit instead.
When I submitted my last game it was 5megs, I just assumed it was the same.
Well, you posted on the forums, so i spent many hours reading through all your tutorials, and jumped at the chance to actually watch something by you. Never did before...anyway, it far surpassed my expectations. So amazingly well done. Animation was very fluid, my favorite part being the guys arms dangling after being shot.
aaaanyway, keep it up. Keep the tutorials comming as well. Think i'll have a look at that boob one again...practice makes perfect.
Very entertaining i would have to say. I enjoyed watching this very much. Needed some kind of console blood though. And spartan shields are round, so maybe you should have used to Gears disk for the shield instead. And...yah, this owns. well done. Should have probably given credit to the movie and to the song being done by Nine Inch Nails.
Right, I forgot that. But, most people should've figured it out. =D
Thank you for taking your time.
When i seen a small filesize and "Clock" in the title, i was ready to gaina few blam points. But i was pleasently surprised. This kicked alot of ass man, well done. Funny as hell.
i expected less for some reason. Being V-day flash and all, i expected something that just kinda fadish. But i was pleasently suprised. It was really very good. And at first i thought the character looked just slightly like South Park for some reason...but i waved that theory off. Until i seen the character that was almost identical to Butters peeing on the hotdog guy ( i believe it was a hotdog stand...). Anyway, very well done. Hope to se more from you soon. Good luck.
Well, when i seen the name Vermillion, i had to watch it, to see how it measured up against my Vermillion pt.2 music video. And i have to say, yours blew mine right out of the water. Your story had a sense of randomness at the beginning, but everything started to fall together near the end. The artwork was not amazing, but it was well done and deserves some praise for sure. There was not alot of animation, mostly tweens and some liquid type animation, but the quality of the artwork makes up for things like that. The style of the song fit the style and story perfecly. right on the nose.
One thing. my eyes were hurting some bad after watching it. Changing from a dark scene to that white static was straining on the eyes. While i enjoyed it for the first 30 seconds, it became a nuisence (spelling?) afterwards.
thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it! I'm sure as my understanding of flash improves my animations will get much stonger. But im glad you enjoyed it!
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